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I'm running out of hope for now,
Breaking through all we've known.
Boarded windows hide the past
And bandages don't seem to last.

One day, we can leave
But we'll just wait and see.
All those times we've felt nothing,
Now have ripped the seams.

We've faded away into the air.
Two lifeless souls and none to care.
I feel invisible in my own world
My head created to crumble.
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NOBODY IS ALONE!
Just feeling down at the time I wrote this. Loneliness is all in your head!! I originally wrote this as a really slow song... but oh, well... :)

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:iconprincessaquarius:
*princessaquarius Jul 30, 2012  Professional Writer
Was actually a good read. ^_^
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~JoplinSpider Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much :)
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:iconprincessaquarius:
*princessaquarius Aug 6, 2012  Professional Writer
You're very welcome. ^_^
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:iconlilredwagon:
WELL written work, JS! ....

There IS a DIFFERENCE between 'being alone' and being 'lonely' ....

My BEST to you and yours, KIND SOUL .... LRW.
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~DelightDreamer Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Good work :clap:
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~JoplinSpider Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you :) :huggle:
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~DelightDreamer Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Np :)
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~Kaykao Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
...Ugh. I find it slightly pathetic how much I can relate to the poem. But the artist comment is right; and luckily I don't like to dwell on things that much. ^^;

As for the poem itself; I'm not much of a poet myself, so I'm not confident enough to critique you, but I find this a very powerful, very well written piece. It's not too short and you didn't drag it out either; and I absolutely love the last stanza. :)
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~JoplinSpider Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much :la:
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~UrDeadlyDesire Jul 28, 2012  Student Writer
"Boarded windows hide the past
And bandages don't seem to last."

What a fucking line^:clap:
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